Suicidal Snowflakes

Just because I have a short attention span doesn\’t mean I…

We are the superior being.

So a friend was working on a “challenge” for some mailing list she’s on. She had 176 words she needed to trim down to 55. I am roxor111 and did it in like 5 min. And I think my version’s better. Sounds less sappy.

Heavy gun belt slides around his slender waste. Metal stabs through the hole. Another day, another dead man. Just another piece of his soul.

Not good to kill, to cause someone to get killed. Makes you sick inside. Weight adjusts, ties to his leg. He leaves. Killing to save life. Family.

Price of his soul.

Ok. so it’s still sappy.. But imagine how sappy that shit was when it was 178 words??

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April 26, 2006 - Posted by | Wordy

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